TSO: Increasing Quality

Bad examples from web. Note use of detail, usually listed as subpoints that often have subpoints.

Topic outline

THM: Because our family has a variety of hobbies and interests, we get a lot of junk mail that we treat like junk.

  1. Definition of junk mail:
    Bulk rate postage ; Advertising
  2. Hobbies and interests of the family:
    Woodworking, Investing ; Gardening and camping
  3. Lists sold by companies
    Farm, fleet, work clothes catalogs; financial brochures; Camping, clothing, and gardening catalogs
  4. Junk mail as junk
    Clutter; garbage

Here I have dropped the subtopic sentences and written more detailed TS.

THM: Because our family has a variety of hobbies and interests, we get a lot of junk mail that we treat like junk.

  1. Junk mail consists of advertising or soliciting brochures, sent at "bulk rate."
  2. The hobbies and interests of our family reflect the kind of junk mail we receive, e.g., wordworking. stock investor, gardening, occasional interest in sports.
  3. The companies we order from sell their lists of customers to firms increasingly remote from the original firms; e.g., sports interest morphed into clothing, campling and gardening.
  4. We treat the catalogs like junk: looking at it seldom and throwing in the garbage.

Sentence outline

 

Sentence oultine extracted from real article
CHE 24 May 2003 on "Evolution, Males and Violence" by David P Barash

Article concludes with tie-in with beginning:
Just like the fictitious fish with which this essay began, it is time for all of us to look around and acknowledge that when it comes to the social construction of sex differences in violence, the traditional view is all wet.


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Edited by: wilkins@mps.ohio-state.edu on Wednesday, 01-Apr-2009 11:07:57 EDT