TSO: Increasing Quality
Bad examples from web. Note use of detail, usually listed as
subpoints that often have subpoints.
THM: Because our family has a variety of hobbies and interests, we get
a lot of junk mail that we treat like junk.
- Definition of junk mail:
Bulk rate postage ; Advertising
- Hobbies and interests of the family:
Woodworking, Investing ; Gardening and camping
- Lists sold by companies
Farm, fleet, work clothes catalogs; financial brochures; Camping, clothing, and gardening catalogs
- Junk mail as junk
Here I have dropped the subtopic sentences and written more detailed TS.
THM: Because our family has a variety of hobbies and interests, we
get a lot of junk mail that we treat like junk.
- Junk mail consists of advertising or soliciting brochures, sent at
- The hobbies and interests of our family reflect the kind of junk mail
we receive, e.g., wordworking. stock investor, gardening, occasional
interest in sports.
- The companies we order from sell their lists of customers to
firms increasingly remote from the original firms; e.g., sports interest
morphed into clothing, campling and gardening.
- We treat the catalogs like junk: looking at it seldom and throwing
in the garbage.
Sentence oultine extracted from real article
CHE 24 May 2003 on "Evolution, Males and Violence" by David P
- The maleness of violence is so overwhelming that it is rarely even
noticed; it is the ocean in which we swim. [This was final sentence of
first paragraph starting from the premise of an intelligent fish
analyzing human behavior.]
- What might be called the "killing establishment" -- soldiers,
executioners, hunters, even slaughterhouse workers -- is overwhelmingly
- The same gender imbalance applies to the uncountable private episodes
of violence that receive little national attention but are the stuff of
many a personal tragedy.
- Violence is also, by and large, something that men direct at other
- ... stand back for switch!
- But as field studies in animal behavior have become more thorough,
the myth of the peaceful primate -- or non-murderous animal generally --
has largely been dispelled.
- Evolutionary biology has an answer, and it emanates directly from
the very definition of male and female (gametes vs. sperm). This and
only this is the meaning of maleness and femaleness: Sperm makers are
called males, egg makers females.
- The consequences of that distinction are weighty indeed. (contrast
males maximizing offsprings vs females nuturing them)
- Natural selection has outfitted males with the tools for success in
male-male competition, much of it violent.
- In the animal world, human no less than nonhuman, competition is
- ... After briefly discussing monogony...
- As we come to species that are more polygynous, however, we find a
steady progression toward greater inequality in size and aggressiveness,
with males getting bigger, and more nasty to each other.
- My point is simply that because of the basic biology of maleness and
femaleness, of sperm and eggs, males are more prone to violence.
- As to basic reproductive biology, human beings are pretty ordinary
- Time and again, and regardless of the methodology used to obtain
their samples, anthropologists have come up with similar results: Before
the cultural homogenization that came with Judeo-Christian colonial (and
marital) doctrine, polygyny was the preferred marital system for more
than 80 percent of human societies.
- A Martian zoologist, reporting on the species Homo sapiens, would
have no doubt: Human beings are mildly polygynous by nature. Like other
polygynous mammals, we exhibit all the hallmarks.
- ... article is at half way point, then going on to discussion of
agression of the sexes outside of reproduction. In trying to understand
difference between females and males the last two paragraphs have TSs:
- If the "answer" is that women are taught to react as they do, then I
must repeat: Why are virtually identical patterns found in every culture
- And let's face it: Biology does in fact explain a whole lot, such
that if we are going to intervene effectively, we would be well advised
to understand the nature of our own predispositions.
Article concludes with tie-in with beginning:
Just like the fictitious fish with which this essay began, it is time
for all of us to look around and acknowledge that when it comes to the
social construction of sex differences in violence, the traditional view
is all wet.
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