Comments inspired by short and medium papers
- Page numbers on anything you ever write.
- Units are in Roman font with space
between number and unit. Hint: view the number as an adjective;
then you will insert a space as in 130 g not 130g and
not 130g (i.e., 130 times variable g).
- Quotation marks and punctuation. The comma and period aren't
strong enough to stand outside
quotations marks, regardless of meaning. Thus ⇒
I say "Always take the period or comma inside the
But meaning sets place of strong colon, question and bang. Thus
⇒I say "Shouldn't the question mark be inside the quote?"
⇒ Didn't I say "Place the quotation mark by its meaning!"?
- Captalizing elements and their abbreviations. Unless the
first word in the sentence, elements are lower case; abbreviations
have first letter capitalized. Thus silicon or Si.
The font style of abreviations is normal, not italic; thus
- Use emphasis sparingly. When using italics or bold face or
- Use only one form at a time. Use one emphasis is o.k., but
use many emphases and use many emphases
- Use sparingly, no more than a few words, not whole lines or
paragraphs. To do so is like screaming. Done in short bursts it might
be effective; if you persist for minute or more, most will think you
have lost control (and you have).
- Word choice is important. Failure to select the most
appropriate word made prose confusing, ineffective, and sometimes
- Figures are active characters; don't hide them. Thus
⇒ Figure 1 proves the eye is mighter than the pen.
⇒Not: It can be seen the pen is puny beside the
picture (Figure 1).
- Dangling participles or the errant gerund.
Not: Walking the beach, the sun rose.
Using a crowbar, the sealed box opened.
Not:Turning the corner, Barrett suprised us.
But: Turning the corner, we bumped into Wilkins.
O.K. Considering the hour, it is surprising Bob
came. [The participle has morphed into a preposition.]
Beginnings and Endings
A common and, if used well, effective ploy is an introduction
relevant to some current event. This suggestion often falls on
deaf ears as may this one. But, not giving up,
I suggest another intro gimick: the clinch-ending that ties the end
to the beginning.
Intro: Remember learning in school the planets in order
from the sun? Did you wonder if you would ever need them. Or worse,
that they could turn out to be wrong? ... Since science never has the
last word, another planet has been found. ...
Ending: ... Eventually some international body will decide
the definition of planet and whether there are some beyond Pluto. But
you can be sure school children will agree that 10 planets are
Topic sentence should be more specific
Not: Many other studies also have shown similar results.
The North Carolina data is supported in California with a solid
connection between drunk driving and running the red light and in Ohio with
nicotine-deprived bar hoppers gunning the engine when the light turns
Sample Sentence Outline for 10 minute talk on planned Petascale Computer
- For more realistic global-climate modeling, the data mesh needs to
increase by 104. From the typical 30 points in the US for any
altitude to 6000 points; the number of altitude points will increase
by by factor of ten. The number of meteorological variables recorded
should also increase from 10 to 30 [made these up].
- Such increases necessitates more than a thousand fold increase in
computing -- comparable to the speed up in a single processor
in the last quarter century (Moore's law).
- Parallel computing is the only solution -- dispersing the data set and
the computation to thousands of computers (CPUs).
- Any real parallel computation requires that any grid point (or atoms)
knows what has happened on adjacent grid points -- current data must
flow quickly from processor to processor.
- Concomitantly, the program on any processor must itself be speeded
up, from a time scaling as a power of the number of mesh point to being
linear in the number.
- Achieving scalable computing -- where each processor runs near
its maximum speed and doubling the number of computers doubles the
number of mesh point computed in the same real time -- necessitates
software enhancements that so far industry cannot meet.
Good writing requires
not only well formulated sentences
but also a sentence flows into next.
Original: The fact that all Type 1a supernovae have, at least,
theoretically the same intrinsic brightness, makes them standard candles.
Furthermore, Type 1A supernovae occur in all types of galaxies because
white dwarfs are common. They are extremely bright objects, meaning they
are visible from Earth even when they occur millions of light years away.
These properties make them a useful tool for measuring distances to
Revised:Theory predicts that white dwarfs produce Type 1a
supernovae of the same intrinsic brightness. The preponderance of white
dwarfs guarantees their progeny in all types of galaxies. Being extremely
bright ensure their detection through much of the universe providing
its solid mapping.
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