Comments inspired by short and medium papers

trivia

Serious

Turning wordy vagueness into terse specifics

Beginnings and Endings

A common and, if used well, effective ploy is an introduction relevant to some current event. This suggestion often falls on deaf ears as may this one. But, not giving up, I suggest another intro gimick: the clinch-ending that ties the end to the beginning.

Intro: Remember learning in school the planets in order from the sun? Did you wonder if you would ever need them. Or worse, that they could turn out to be wrong? ... Since science never has the last word, another planet has been found. ...
 
Ending: ... Eventually some international body will decide the definition of planet and whether there are some beyond Pluto. But you can be sure school children will agree that 10 planets are enough.

Topic sentence should be more specific

Not: Many other studies also have shown similar results.
  
But: The North Carolina data is supported in California with a solid connection between drunk driving and running the red light and in Ohio with nicotine-deprived bar hoppers gunning the engine when the light turns yellow.

Sample Sentence Outline for 10 minute talk on planned Petascale Computer

  1. For more realistic global-climate modeling, the data mesh needs to increase by 104. From the typical 30 points in the US for any altitude to 6000 points; the number of altitude points will increase by by factor of ten. The number of meteorological variables recorded should also increase from 10 to 30 [made these up].
  2. Such increases necessitates more than a thousand fold increase in computing -- comparable to the speed up in a single processor in the last quarter century (Moore's law).
  3. Parallel computing is the only solution -- dispersing the data set and the computation to thousands of computers (CPUs).
  4. Any real parallel computation requires that any grid point (or atoms) knows what has happened on adjacent grid points -- current data must flow quickly from processor to processor.
  5. Concomitantly, the program on any processor must itself be speeded up, from a time scaling as a power of the number of mesh point to being linear in the number.
  6. Achieving scalable computing -- where each processor runs near its maximum speed and doubling the number of computers doubles the number of mesh point computed in the same real time -- necessitates software enhancements that so far industry cannot meet.

    Good writing requires                   
    not only well formulated sentences
    but also a sentence flows into next.

    Original: The fact that all Type 1a supernovae have, at least, theoretically the same intrinsic brightness, makes them standard candles. Furthermore, Type 1A supernovae occur in all types of galaxies because white dwarfs are common. They are extremely bright objects, meaning they are visible from Earth even when they occur millions of light years away. These properties make them a useful tool for measuring distances to faraway galaxies.
     
    Revised:Theory predicts that white dwarfs produce Type 1a supernovae of the same intrinsic brightness. The preponderance of white dwarfs guarantees their progeny in all types of galaxies. Being extremely bright ensure their detection through much of the universe providing its solid mapping.


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    Edited by: wilkins@mps.ohio-state.edu on Thursday, 17-May-2012 17:22:59 EDT