Revision of Draft Manuscript

1. Overall structure. Does manuscript achieve intended objective?
   • Explain clearly and concisely a piece of science;
   • Is it aimed at the intended audience?
2. Excess or missing material.
   • What could be omitted without affecting the argument?
   • What have you assumed, but not explained, that a reader must know for the argument to be convincing?
3. Abstract: Is it clear and specific with all the main points?
   • Does it promise claims not developed in the text?
   • Are the conclusions consistent with the abstract?
4. Topic sentences.
   • Does every paragraph have a topic sentence?
   • Do topic sentences, read alone, reveal paper's essence?
   • Is topic sentence the first sentence of the paragraph?
5. Paragraphs.
   • Have you introduced a topic and then failed to develop it?
   • Or developed it using terms so varied that a reader cannot connect them with announced topic?
   • Did you fail to anticipate in the issue important themes that you in fact develop in the discussion?
   • Do you develop an argument in discussion which was not mentioned in the issue, especially in the topic sentence?
6. Individual sentences.
   • Are the subjects' characters doing the action of the verbs?
   • Are subjects consistent or do they jump around in para?
   • Do sentences display complex material clearly and concisely?
   • Have you put emphasis at the sentence's end by

     trimming the end;

     moving less important materials to the left;

     moving important materials to the right?